In some countries, more and more people are becoming interested in finding out about the history of the house or building they live in. What are the reasons for this? How can people research this?

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  • ALEI
    University: Dalian Maritime University
    Nationality: 中国
    October 17, 2021 at 6:28 am

    In some countries, more and more people are becoming interested in finding out about the history of the house or building they live in. What are the reasons for this? How can people research this?

    There is a trend that an increasing number of citizens are gradually becoming cultural awareness, and they are attempting to work out more details about their houses or accommodation. I opine that it is a positive pattern in the development of cultural diversity.

    A possible reason associated with this phenomenon is a variety of people showing cultural awareness. It is not uncommon that numerous countries intend to strength their own influence in culture such as architecture. One major measure of promoting cultural awareness is to raise cultural campaigns to deepen people’s understanding of their history of culture. As a result, a growing number of people pay closer attention to the construction in the country. After this, people may master more information about its development, and then they may be keen to know more about the history of their lived building. On the other hand, education also casts a light on the explanation for this social movement. The main reason is that everyone is educated to focus on and enhance their culture’s identity, and in such a way they also are likely to know about the history of their lived ones.

    Regarding the methods to figure out the history of citizens’ accommodation as precise as possible, there are various potential choices, such as turning to elderly people who lived there for a long time, and the museums with artifacts as well as libraries with historical records. To begin with, most interested people who intend to know the whole picture of their houses or building, are likely to visit a senior citizen to ask about the history. The other two ways are relying on more scientific research strategies, with recorded words or historical items. To travel to a local museum to find out the related items with your building is a good way to know what is the exact history, provided that the artifacts existed with corresponding records. And then libraries play a vital role to give people an opportunity to acquire more knowledge about the local history, which is more accessible and understandable for ordinary people.

    October 18, 2021 at 9:38 am

    There is a trend that (delete) an increasing number of citizens are gradually becoming cultural awareness (aware), and they are attempting to work out (word choice error) more details about their houses or accommodation. I opine  (use a simpler word) that it is a positive pattern in the development of cultural diversity.

    A possible reason associated with this phenomenon is a variety of (simplify) people showing cultural awareness. It is not uncommon that numerous countries intend to strength (strengthen) their own influence in culture such as architecture. One major measure of promoting cultural awareness is to raise cultural campaigns to deepen people’s understanding of their history of culture. As a result, a growing number of people pay closer attention to the construction in the country. After this, people may master more information about its development, and then they may be keen to know more about the history of their lived building. On the other hand, education also casts a light on the explanation for this social movement. The main reason is that everyone is educated to focus on and enhance their culture’s identity, and in such a way they also are likely to know about the history of their lived ones.

    Regarding the methods to figure out the history of citizens’ accommodation as precise as possible, there are various potential choices, such as turning to elderly people who lived there for a long time, and the museums with artifacts as well as libraries with historical records. To begin with, most interested people who intend to know the whole picture of their houses or building, are likely to visit a senior citizen to ask about the history. The other two ways are relying on more scientific research strategies, with recorded words or historical items. To travel to a local museum to find out the related items with your building is a good way to know what is the exact history, provided that the artifacts existed with corresponding records. And then libraries play a vital role to give people an opportunity to acquire more knowledge about the local history, which is more accessible and understandable for ordinary people.

    October 18, 2021 at 9:38 am

    Partial Revision (please fix similar errors, revise whole essay, and resubmit)

    ALEI
    University: Dalian Maritime University
    Nationality: 中国
    October 18, 2021 at 3:24 pm

    Thank you very much for your effort in revising the essay.

    October 18, 2021 at 3:33 pm

    Also, restrict each paragraph to 90 words.

    October 19, 2021 at 8:47 am

    Students posted new topic : https://writersforme.com/forums/topic/in-some-countries-more1019/

    An increasing number of citizens are gradually becoming culturally aware, and they are attempting to find out more details about their houses or accommodation. I believe that it is a positive pattern in the development of cultural diversity.

     

    A possible reason associated with this phenomenon is some people showing cultural awareness. It is not uncommon that numerous countries intend to strengthen their own influence in culture, such as architecture. One major measure of promoting culturally aware is to raise cultural campaigns to deepen people’s understanding of their history of culture. As a result, a growing number of people pay closer attention to the construction in the country. After this, people may master more information about its development, and then they may be keen to know more about the history of the building they lived in. On the other hand, education also casts a light on the explanation for this social movement. The main reason is that everyone is educated to focus on the country’s culture. Education can thus enhance their culture’s identity, and in such a way, they are also likely to know about the history of their lived ones.

     

    Regarding the methods used to figure out the history of citizens’ accommodation or house as precisely as possible, there are various potential choices, such as turning to older people who lived there for a long time, and the museums with artifacts and libraries with historical records. To begin with, most interested people who intend to know the whole picture of their houses or building are likely to visit a senior citizen to ask about the history. The other two ways are relying on more scientific research strategies, with recorded words or historical items. Traveling to a local museum to find out the related articles with your building is an excellent way to know the exact history, provided that the artifacts existed with corresponding records. And then libraries play a vital role to give people an opportunity to acquire more knowledge about the local history, which is more accessible and understandable for ordinary people.

    October 19, 2021 at 8:56 am

    An increasing number of citizens are gradually becoming culturally aware, and they are attempting to find out more details about their houses (singular) or accommodation. I believe that (delete) it (this) is a positive pattern in the development of cultural diversity.

    A possible reason associated with this phenomenon is some people showing cultural awareness. It is not uncommon that (delete) numerous countries intend (are attempting) to strengthen their own influence in culture, such as architecture. One major measure of promoting culturally aware (awareness) is to raise cultural campaigns to deepen people’s understanding of their history of culture. As a result, a growing number of people pay closer attention to the  (delete) construction in the country. After this, people may master (learn) more information (delete) about its development, and then they may be keen to know more about the history of the building they lived in (their home).

    On the other hand, education also casts a light on the explanation for (explains) this social movement. The main reason is that everyone is educated to focus on the country’s culture. Education can thus enhance their culture’s (cultural) identity, and in such a way, (delete) they are also likely to know about the history of their lived ones.

    Regarding the methods used to figure out (research) the history of citizens’ accommodation or house (buildings) as precisely as possible, there are various potential choices, (split into second sentence here) such as turning to older people who lived there for a long time, and the museums with artifacts and libraries with historical records (simplify – too wordy). To begin with, most (delete) interested people who intend (want) to know the whole picture of their houses (singular) or building are likely to visit a senior citizen to ask about the history. The other two ways are relying (rely) on more (delete) scientific research strategies, with recorded words or historical items (delete). Traveling to a local museum to find out (delete) the related articles with your building is an excellent way to know the exact history, provided that the artifacts existed with corresponding records (exist). And then (Also,) libraries play a vital role to give people an opportunity to acquire more knowledge about the local history, which is more accessible and understandable for ordinary people.

    (Add conclusion paragraph)

    October 19, 2021 at 2:07 pm

    Final Revision

    ALEI
    University: Dalian Maritime University
    Nationality: 中国
    October 19, 2021 at 2:58 pm

    Thank you very much for all the helpful corrections.