The following appeared as an editorial in the student newspaper of Groveton College.

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  • A-lister
    University: XISU
    Nationality: PRC
    February 26, 2020 at 4:56 am

    The following appeared as an editorial in the student newspaper of Groveton College.

    “To combat the recently reported dramatic rise in cheating among college and university students, these institutions should adopt honor codes similar to Groveton’s, which calls for students to agree not to cheat in their academic endeavors and to notify a faculty member if they suspect that others have cheated. Groveton’s honor code replaced an old-fashioned system in which students were closely monitored by teachers and an average of thirty cases of cheating per year were reported. The honor code has proven far more successful: in the first year it was in place, students reported twenty-one cases of cheating; five years later, this figure had dropped to fourteen. Moreover, in a recent survey conducted by the Groveton honor council, a majority of students said that they would be less likely to cheat with an honor code in place than without.”

    In this recommendation, the author recommends all universities and colleges adopting honor codes similar to Groveton’s in order to curb cheating on exams among students. While the program might be beneficial to some extent, there are a number of questions concerning the author’s suggestion that needs further analysis. The argument could end up convincing or invalid, depending on the answers to those questions.

    To begin with, the first question we need to consider is that whether students’ reports about the cheating cases in Groveton are reliable. Because it is clear that the honor code system in Groveton relies primarily on students’ self-control and their own supervision. In this case, it is likely that students lie about their true behaviors during exams in order to gain higher grades; and it is also inevitable that they will promise not to disclose each other’ s wrong deeds so that they can all cheat during exams and without worrying to be punished. If the author is able to confirm the validity of the reports, then his/her argument will shore up; otherwise, it will be weakened.

    In addition, even if the reports indeed entirely reflect students’ true condition, the question concerning the number of students in Groveton during the five years still needs to be confirmed.
    For example, if the total number of students declined after the honor code system being implemented, then the cheaters may be even more than that in previous years. Therefore, the student population will not be problematic if it remains the same; if not, the author’s opinion will be challenged.

    Finally, granted that the two aforementioned questions are reasonably answered, the question concerning the difference between student groups still needs further consideration. Since the recommendation does not mention about students’ personal traits, we cannot conclude the honor code will also be as effective in other universities or colleges as in Grveton. For instance, if, ideally, most students in Groveton possess honesty and self-discipline, then it is surely that they will strictly follow the rules in honor code system; but the system may not work in universities where students have more loose requirements for themselves. In this scenario, the author’s argument will be strengthened if he/she points out that the students in Groveton represents the average level, or, it can be untenable.

    To summarize, only after the three questions concerning the reliability of students’ reports, the number of students after the implementation of honor code and the representativeness of the student group in the referred university are adequately answered, can we evaluate the author’s argument and reach a logically sound conclusion.

     

    March 7, 2020 at 3:03 am

    Score: 48.5

    Issues:

    1. Restrict your essay to 400 words.
    2. Restrict each paragraph to 90 words.
    3. About 60% of the sentences exceed 20 words. Shorten/split them.
    4. About 30% of the sentences are passive. Convert some of them into their active counterparts.

    I will send you screenshots to illustrate specific problems/errors.

    A-lister
    University: XISU
    Nationality: PRC
    March 29, 2020 at 10:41 am

    <p style=”box-sizing: border-box; margin: 0px 0px 1em; color: #45494d; font-family: Nunito, Helvetica, Arial, sans-serif; font-size: 16px;”>In this recommendation, to curb students’ malpractice in exams, the author recommends all universities and colleges adopting honor codes, which resembles Groveton’s. While the program might be beneficial to some extent, several questions about the author’s suggestion needed further analysis. The validity of the argument depends on the answers to those questions.</p>
    <p style=”box-sizing: border-box; margin: 0px 0px 1em; color: #45494d; font-family: Nunito, Helvetica, Arial, sans-serif; font-size: 16px;”>To begin with, the first question we need to consider is the authenticity of the figure on cheating in Groveton. Because the honor code system merely relies on students’ self-control and their supervision. In this case, without teachers’ supervision, it is even easier for some students to cheat on exams without telling the truth. However, If the author can confirm the validity of the reports, then his/her argument will shore up; otherwise, it will be weakened.</p>
    <p style=”box-sizing: border-box; margin: 0px 0px 1em; color: #45494d; font-family: Nunito, Helvetica, Arial, sans-serif; font-size: 16px;”>Additionally, even if the reports indeed reflect students’ real condition, the author still needs to confirm the number of students in Groveton during the five years.For example, the cheaters wpuld be even more than that in previous years if the total number of students declined while the proportion of cheaters maintained at the same level. However, the student population will not be problematic if it remains the same; if not, the author’s opinion will be challenged.</p>
    <p style=”box-sizing: border-box; margin: 0px 0px 1em; color: #45494d; font-family: Nunito, Helvetica, Arial, sans-serif; font-size: 16px;”>Finally, granted that the author will reasonably answer the two mentioned questions, the question about the personality among students still needs further consideration. Since the recommendation does not mention about students’ traits in Groveton, we cannot conclude the honor code will also be as effective in other universities or colleges as in Groveton. For instance, if, ideally, most students in Groveton are honest and self-disciplined, then it is definite that they will follow the rules in honor code system; but the system may not work in universities where students have more loose requirements for themselves. In this scenario, the author’s argument will be strengthened if he/she points out that the students in Groveton represents the average level in terms of personal traits, or, it can be untenable.</p>
    <p style=”box-sizing: border-box; margin: 0px 0px 1em; color: #45494d; font-family: Nunito, Helvetica, Arial, sans-serif; font-size: 16px;”>To summarize, only after the author adequately answers the three questions about the reliability of students’ reports in Groveton, the total number of students and  their personalities, can we assess the author’s argument and reach a logical and sound conclusion.</p>
    <p style=”box-sizing: border-box; margin: 0px; color: #45494d; font-family: Nunito, Helvetica, Arial, sans-serif; font-size: 16px;”></p>

    March 31, 2020 at 12:53 am

    You need to remove all the unreadable codes.

    A-lister
    University: XISU
    Nationality: PRC
    March 31, 2020 at 1:28 am

    In this recommendation, to curb students’ malpractice in exams, the author recommends all universities and colleges adopting honor codes, which resembles Groveton’s. While the program might be beneficial to some extent, several questions about the author’s suggestion needed further analysis. The validity of the argument depends on the answers to those questions.

    To begin with, the first question we need to consider is the authenticity of the figure on cheating in Groveton. Because the honor code system merely relies on students’ self-control and their supervision. In this case, without teachers’ supervision, it is even easier for some students to cheat on exams without telling the truth. However, If the author can confirm the validity of the reports, then his/her argument will shore up; otherwise, it will be weakened.Additionally, even if the reports indeed reflect students’ real condition, the author still needs to confirm the number of students in Groveton during the five years.For example, the cheaters wpuld be even more than that in previous years if the total number of students declined while the proportion of cheaters maintained at the same level. However, the student population will not be problematic if it remains the same; if not, the author’s opinion will be challenged.

    Finally, granted that the author will reasonably answer the two mentioned questions, the question about the personality among students still needs further consideration. Since the recommendation does not mention about students’ traits in Groveton, we cannot conclude the honor code will also be as effective in other universities or colleges as in Groveton. For instance, if, ideally, most students in Groveton are honest and self-disciplined, then it is definite that they will follow the rules in honor code system; but the system may not work in universities where students have more loose requirements for themselves. In this scenario, the author’s argument will be strengthened if he/she points out that the students in Groveton represents the average level in terms of personal traits, or, it can be untenable.

    To summarize, only after the author adequately answers the three questions about the reliability of students’ reports in Groveton, the total number of students and  their personalities, can we assess the author’s argument and reach a logical and sound conclusion.

    April 7, 2020 at 11:59 pm

    Score: 45.7

    Issues:

    1. About 50% of the sentences exceed 20 words. Shorten/split them.
    2. About 20% of the sentences are passive. Convert some of them into their active counterparts.
    3. Lengthy paragraphs. Restrict each paragraph to 90 words.

    I will send you screenshots to illustrate specific problems/errors.