Reply To: Some people think teachers should be responsible for teaching students to judge what is right and wrong so that they can behave well.

TOEFL, IELTS, Personal Statement and CV Proofreading Services. IELTS Writing Some people think teachers should be responsible for teaching students to judge what is right and wrong so that they can behave well. Reply To: Some people think teachers should be responsible for teaching students to judge what is right and wrong so that they can behave well.

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University: University of Wisconsin
October 14, 2020 at 3:49 pm

Score: ungraded

Issues:

  1. Lengthy paragraphs. Restrict each paragraph to 90 words.
  2. About 35% of the sentences exceed 20 words. Shorten/split them.
  3. About 25% of the sentences are passive. Convert some of them into their active counterparts.

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