Reply To: Some people believe that allowing children to make their own choices on everyday matters is likely to result in a society of individuals who only think about their own wishes. Other people believe that it is important for children to make decisions about matters that affect them.

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University: University of Wisconsin
October 14, 2020 at 3:53 pm

Score: ungraded

Issues:

  1. Lengthy paragraphs. Restrict each paragraph to 90 words.
  2. About 60% of the sentences exceed 20 words. Shorten/split them.
  3. State your argument clearly in your introduction, why do you agree?

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