Reply To: Many countries believe that international tourism has harmful effects.

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University: University of Wisconsin
October 14, 2020 at 4:00 pm

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Issues:

  1. About 50% of the sentences exceed 20 words. Shorten/split them.
  2. About 20% of the sentences are passive. Convert some of them into their active counterparts.
  3. Make your argument clear in the introduction, do not just state that you will be making an argument, what is your argument?

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