Reply To: Some experts believe that it is better for children to begin learning a foreign language at primary school rather than at secondary school

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University: University of Wisconsin
October 14, 2020 at 4:01 pm

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Issues:

  1. Lengthy paragraphs. Restrict each paragraph to 90 words.
  2. About 55% of the sentences exceed 20 words. Shorten/split them.
  3. About 15% of the sentences are passive. Convert some of them into their active counterparts.

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