Reply To: Some experts believe that it is better for children to begin learning a foreign language at primary school rather than at secondary school

TOEFL, IELTS, Personal Statement and CV Proofreading Services. IELTS Writing Some experts believe that it is better for children to begin learning a foreign language at primary school rather than at secondary school Reply To: Some experts believe that it is better for children to begin learning a foreign language at primary school rather than at secondary school

October 14, 2020 at 4:01 pm

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Issues:

  1. Lengthy paragraphs. Restrict each paragraph to 90 words.
  2. About 55% of the sentences exceed 20 words. Shorten/split them.
  3. About 15% of the sentences are passive. Convert some of them into their active counterparts.

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