Reply To: Some experts believe that it is better for children to begin learning a foreign language at primary school rather than at secondary school
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October 14, 2020 at 4:01 pm
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Issues:
- Lengthy paragraphs. Restrict each paragraph to 90 words.
- About 55% of the sentences exceed 20 words. Shorten/split them.
- About 15% of the sentences are passive. Convert some of them into their active counterparts.
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