Reply To: Some people believe that it is good to share as much information as possible in scientific research, business and the academic world. Others believe that some information is too important or too valuable to be shared freely.

TOEFL, IELTS, Personal Statement and CV Proofreading Services. IELTS Writing Some people believe that it is good to share as much information as possible in scientific research, business and the academic world. Others believe that some information is too important or too valuable to be shared freely. Reply To: Some people believe that it is good to share as much information as possible in scientific research, business and the academic world. Others believe that some information is too important or too valuable to be shared freely.

October 14, 2020 at 4:04 pm

Score: ungraded

Issues:

  1. About 55% of the sentences exceed 20 words. Shorten/split them.
  2. Wordy – remove unnecessary words and phrases
  3. Make your argument clear in your introduction – provide some reasoning to back up your argument in the introduction.

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