Reply To: Some people argue that the development of technology is making our lives too complex

TOEFL, IELTS, Personal Statement and CV Proofreading Services. IELTS Writing Some people argue that the development of technology is making our lives too complex Reply To: Some people argue that the development of technology is making our lives too complex

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University: University of Wisconsin
October 14, 2020 at 4:07 pm

Score: ungraded

Issues:

  1. About 60% of the sentences exceed 20 words. Shorten/split them.
  2. About 20% of the sentences are passive. Convert some of them into their active counterparts.
  3. Article errors
  4. Make your argument clearer in your introduction, why is not living without technology a solution?

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