Reply To: Successful sports professionals can earn a great deal of money more than people in other important professions

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University: University of Wisconsin
October 14, 2020 at 4:20 pm

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Issues:

  1. About 45% of the sentences exceed 20 words. Shorten/split them.
  2. About 20% of the sentences are passive. Convert some of them into their active counterparts.
  3. Article errors
  4. Verb form errors

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