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EuStemJobs Grant Seeker
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University: University of Wisconsin
October 14, 2020 at 4:31 pm

Score: ungraded

Issues:

  1. About 55% of the sentences exceed 20 words. Shorten/split them.
  2. About 25% of the sentences are passive. Convert some of them into their active counterparts.
  3. Make your argument clear in the introduction – why are they more negative?
  4. Verb form errors

I will send you screenshots to illustrate specific problems/errors.