Reply To: The following appeared in a memo from a vice president of Quiot Manufacturing

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University: University of Wisconsin
October 15, 2020 at 2:22 pm

Score: ungraded

Issues:

  1. Lengthy paragraphs. Restrict each paragraph to 110 words.
  2. About 60% of the sentences exceed 20 words. Shorten/split them.
  3. About 30% of the sentences are passive. Convert some of them into their active counterparts.

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