Reply To: A recent study of our customers suggests that our company is wasting the money it spends on its patented Endure manufacturing process, which ensures that our socks are strong enough to last for two years.

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University: University of Wisconsin
October 15, 2020 at 2:40 pm

Score: ungraded

Issues:

  1. About 20% of the sentences are passive. Convert some of them into their active counterparts.
  2. Preposition errors
  3. Repetitive word choice – vary your word choice

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