Reply To: Some parents give their kids (primary or middle school) a small amount of money weekly, while others fear this may have a bad influence on kids. What is your opinion? 

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University: University of Wisconsin
October 15, 2020 at 3:47 pm

Score: ungraded

Issues:

  1. About 50% of the sentences exceed 20 words. Shorten/split them.
  2. About 10% of the sentences are passive. Convert some of them into their active counterparts.
  3. Preposition errors

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