Reply To: The rules that societies today expect young people to follow and obey are too strict.

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October 15, 2020 at 8:48 pm

Score: ungraded

Issues:

  1. About 30% of the sentences exceed 20 words. Shorten/split them.
  2. About 25% of the sentences are passive. Convert some of them into their active counterparts.

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