Reply To: Many countries believe that international tourism has harmful effects.

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University: University of Wisconsin
October 16, 2020 at 3:04 pm

Score: 42.3

Issues:

  1. Lengthy paragraphs. Restrict each paragraph to 90 words.
  2. About 40% of the sentences exceed 20 words. Shorten/split them.
  3. Wordy – remove unnecessary words to make your argument clearer

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