Reply To: At university, sports and social activities are just as important as classes and libraries and should receive equal financial support

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University: University of Wisconsin
October 19, 2020 at 3:58 pm

Score: ungraded

Issues:

  1. About 30% of the sentences exceed 20 words. Shorten/split them.
  2. About 20% of the sentences are passive. Convert some of them into their active counterparts.
  3. Do not repeat the question in your introduction

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