Reply To: Some people argue that the development of technology is making our lives too complex
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October 19, 2020 at 4:24 pm
Score: 45.2
Issues:
- About 40% of the sentences exceed 20 words. Shorten/split them.
- About 20% of the sentences are passive. Convert some of them into their active counterparts.
- Refer to the previous suggestion about your introduction
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