Reply To: Some people argue that the development of technology is making our lives too complex

TOEFL, IELTS, Personal Statement and CV Proofreading Services. IELTS Writing Some people argue that the development of technology is making our lives too complex Reply To: Some people argue that the development of technology is making our lives too complex

October 19, 2020 at 4:24 pm

Score: 45.2

Issues:

  1. About 40% of the sentences exceed 20 words. Shorten/split them.
  2. About 20% of the sentences are passive. Convert some of them into their active counterparts.
  3. Refer to the previous suggestion about your introduction

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