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University: University of Wisconsin
October 19, 2020 at 4:45 pm

Score: ungraded

Issues:

  1. About 65% of the sentences exceed 20 words. Shorten/split them.
  2. About 25% of the sentences are passive. Convert some of them into their active counterparts.
  3. Spelling errors
  4. Punctuation and spacing errors

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