Reply To: Should we follow fashion?

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University: University of Wisconsin
October 19, 2020 at 9:15 pm

Score: ungraded

Issues:

  1. About 35% of the sentences exceed 20 words. Shorten/split them.
  2. Lots of punctuation errors. Learn how to use “,” and “;”.
  3. Many unclear pronouns (i.e., it). Replace all unclear pronouns with nouns.

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