Reply To: In twenty years there will be fewer cars in use than there are today.

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University: University of Wisconsin
October 21, 2020 at 3:09 pm

Score: ungraded

Issues:

  1. About 50% of the sentences exceed 20 words. Shorten/split them.
  2. About 15% of the sentences are passive. Convert some of them into their active counterparts.
  3. Word choice errors
  4. Many sentences are unclear

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