Reply To: Do you agree or disagree with the statement? Economic growth should be slowed down by concerns about the environment.

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University: University of Wisconsin
October 21, 2020 at 3:11 pm

Score: ungraded

Issues:

  1. About 65% of the sentences exceed 20 words. Shorten/split them.
  2. About 35% of the sentences are passive. Convert some of them into their active counterparts.
  3. Lengthy paragraphs. Restrict each paragraph to 90 words.

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