Reply To: The extended family (grandparents, cousins, aunts, and uncles) is less important now than it was in the past.

TOEFL, IELTS, Personal Statement and CV Proofreading Services. TOEFL Writing The extended family (grandparents, cousins, aunts, and uncles) is less important now than it was in the past. Reply To: The extended family (grandparents, cousins, aunts, and uncles) is less important now than it was in the past.

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University: University of Wisconsin
October 21, 2020 at 3:39 pm

Score: 38.2

Issues:

  1. About 30% of the sentences exceed 20 words. Shorten/split them.
  2. About 10% of the sentences are passive. Convert some of them into their active counterparts.
  3. Refer to previous comments (spelling, article, plural/singular)

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