Reply To: The extended family (grandparents, cousins, aunts, and uncles) is less important now than it was in the past.
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October 21, 2020 at 3:39 pm
Score: 38.2
Issues:
- About 30% of the sentences exceed 20 words. Shorten/split them.
- About 10% of the sentences are passive. Convert some of them into their active counterparts.
- Refer to previous comments (spelling, article, plural/singular)
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