Reply To: When you give money to charitable organizations, do you think that you should choose how the donation will be used

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University: University of Wisconsin
October 24, 2020 at 2:53 pm

Score: ungraded

Issues:

  1. About 40% of the sentences exceed 20 words. Shorten/split them.
  2. About 20% of the sentences are passive. Convert some of them into their active counterparts.
  3. Article errors
  4. Preposition errors
  5. Verb form errors

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