Reply To: Do you agree or disagree with the following statement? The government should spend more money on improving young children’s education than on improving university education.

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University: University of Wisconsin
October 24, 2020 at 3:44 pm

Score: 38.1

Issues:

  1. About 40% of the sentences exceed 20 words. Shorten/split them.
  2. About 15% of the sentences are passive. Convert some of them into their active counterparts.

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