Reply To: The university will spend money on a dormitory to improve the life quality of students, which of the following do you think is the best way?

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University: University of Wisconsin
October 25, 2020 at 12:15 am

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Issues:

  1. About 30% of the sentences exceed 20 words. Shorten/split them.
  2. About 15% of the sentences are passive. Convert some of them into their active counterparts.

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