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University: University of Wisconsin
October 26, 2020 at 8:05 pm

 

Score: 57.4

Issues:

  1. About 30% of the sentences exceed 20 words. Shorten/split them.
  2. About 10% of the sentences are passive. Convert some of them into their active counterparts.

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