Reply To: If people have the opportunity to get a secure job, they should take it right away rather than wait for a job that would be more satisfying. Use specific reasons and examples to support your answer.
Nowadays, people have a wide-ranging[ word form error ] debate about whether getting a secure job is better than waiting for a satisfying one. However[wrong coordinating conjunction ] , different people have diversified opinions, [punctuation error ] one of which is that( there is no reason)[ verbose ] to wait for a contented job because of risk[specify, what risk? ] . However[ wrong coordinating conjunction ] , I still believe that people should wait for a job that would be more satisfying.
Admittedly, getting a secure job enable[ grammatical error ] people to have peace of mind. Because[grammatical error ], for them, the income from a secure job is enough to pay the bills of rent and other life necessaries. [ lack of transition word ]They do not need to worry about suffering hungry,( and thus)[ verbose ] a secure job is the best option.
When it is undeniable that[unclear/verbose ] a secure job has less risk,[ punctuation error ] people should not ignore that satisfying work is a contributor to a more comfortable life. Since people are more likely to get a decent salary in a contented job[incomplete sentence ]. For instance, rather than serving a secure job, my sister chose satisfying labor [ word choice error ]as an engineer in a famous technology company. She could move her apartment to a quiet environment and buy things whatever she likes [tense error ]as she gained a decent salary and advanced knowledge. [poor coherence ]Therefore, a satisfying job allows people to have a better life.
Furthermore, people will give up a security job soon due to no interest[rephrase ]. Without interest, the[ article error ] security job is not a pleasure, but a burden to get a salary. For example, I worked in a restaurant as an attendant to pay for my college tuition. The time spent there is useless as l repeat [ tense error ]the same things every day. Also, no chance is [ tense error]given to me to improve my work capability[bad coherence due to the use of passive voice ]. Therefore, if people take [ grammatical error/subjunctive voice ]a satisfying job, then they will feel [ grammatical error]a sense of fulfillment and devote their time and energy to it[unclear pronoun ].
According to the reasons given above, I insist that waiting for a satisfying job is[ grammatical error/subjunctive voice] a better choice.