Reply To: What is the most useful action for people to help the environment in their local communities? (1)plant trees and create parks. (2)persuade local shops to stop providing plastic bags. (3)Increase access to public transportation, and reduce the automobiles on roads.

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University: University of Wisconsin
October 27, 2020 at 3:43 am

Score: ungraded

Issues:

  1. About 65% of the sentences exceed 20 words. Shorten/split them.
  2. About 20% of the sentences are passive. Convert some of them into their active counterparts.

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