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University: University of Wisconsin
October 27, 2020 at 8:21 pm

 

Score: ungraded

Issues:

  1. About 90% of the sentences exceed 20 words. Shorten/split them.
  2. About 40% of the sentences are passive. Convert some of them into their active counterparts.

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