Reply To: Universities should require every student to take a variety of courses outside the student’s field of study.

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University: University of Wisconsin
October 27, 2020 at 8:33 pm

Score: ungraded

Issues:

  1. About 55% of the sentences exceed 20 words. Shorten/split them.
  2. About 35% of the sentences are passive. Convert some of them into their active counterparts.
  3. Lengthy essay. Simplify verbose sentences.
  4. Lengthy paragraphs. Restrict each paragraph to 110 words.

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