Reply To: Governments should focus on solving the immediate problems of today rather than on trying to solve the anticipated problems of the future.

TOEFL, IELTS, Personal Statement and CV Proofreading Services. GRE Writing Governments should focus on solving the immediate problems of today rather than on trying to solve the anticipated problems of the future. Reply To: Governments should focus on solving the immediate problems of today rather than on trying to solve the anticipated problems of the future.

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University: University of Wisconsin
October 27, 2020 at 8:47 pm

 

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Issues:

  1. About 75% of the sentences exceed 20 words. Shorten/split them.
  2. About 25% of the sentences are passive. Convert some of them into their active counterparts.
  3. Lengthy paragraphs. Restrict each paragraph to 120 words.

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