Reply To: Movies and television have more negative effects than positive effects on the way young people behave.

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University: University of Wisconsin
November 2, 2020 at 4:27 pm

Score: ungraded

Issues:

  1. About 35% of the sentences exceed 20 words. Shorten/split them.
  2. About 20% of the sentences are passive. Convert some of them into their active counterparts.
  3. Support your argument in the introduction – why do you think movies are a good influence?
  4. Preposition errors