Reply To: Movies and television have more negative effects than positive effects on the way young people behave.

TOEFL, IELTS, Personal Statement and CV Proofreading Services. TOEFL Writing Movies and television have more negative effects than positive effects on the way young people behave. Reply To: Movies and television have more negative effects than positive effects on the way young people behave.

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University: University of Wisconsin
November 2, 2020 at 4:27 pm

Score: ungraded

Issues:

  1. About 35% of the sentences exceed 20 words. Shorten/split them.
  2. About 20% of the sentences are passive. Convert some of them into their active counterparts.
  3. Support your argument in the introduction – why do you think movies are a good influence?
  4. Preposition errors