Reply To: People should take time to relax with hobbies or physical activities that are very different from what they do at work

TOEFL, IELTS, Personal Statement and CV Proofreading Services. TOEFL Writing People should take time to relax with hobbies or physical activities that are very different from what they do at work Reply To: People should take time to relax with hobbies or physical activities that are very different from what they do at work

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University: University of Wisconsin
November 2, 2020 at 4:54 pm

Score: ungraded

Issues:

  1. About 40% of the sentences exceed 20 words. Shorten/split them.
  2. About 10% of the sentences are passive. Convert some of them into their active counterparts.
  3. Spelling errors
  4. Singular versus plural errors

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