Reply To: Movies and television have more negative effects than positive effects on the way young people behave.

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University: University of Wisconsin
November 2, 2020 at 9:07 pm

Score: ungraded

Issues:

  1. About 70% of the sentences exceed 20 words. Shorten/split them.
  2. About 10% of the sentences are passive. Convert some of them into their active counterparts.
  3. Spacing errors, always have one space after a period or comma

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