Reply To: Movies and television have more negative effects than positive effects on the way young people behave.

TOEFL, IELTS, Personal Statement and CV Proofreading Services. TOEFL Writing Movies and television have more negative effects than positive effects on the way young people behave. Reply To: Movies and television have more negative effects than positive effects on the way young people behave.

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University: University of Wisconsin
November 2, 2020 at 9:07 pm

Score: ungraded

Issues:

  1. About 70% of the sentences exceed 20 words. Shorten/split them.
  2. About 10% of the sentences are passive. Convert some of them into their active counterparts.
  3. Spacing errors, always have one space after a period or comma

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