Reply To: The rules that societies today expect young people to follow and obey are too strict.

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University: University of Wisconsin
November 6, 2020 at 5:11 pm

Score: 58.8

Issues:

  1. About 35% of the sentences exceed 20 words. Shorten/split them.
  2. About 35% of the sentences are passive. Convert some of them into their active counterparts.
  3. Refer to previous suggestions: many subject-ver agreement errors
  4. Article errors

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