Reply To: People should take time to relax with hobbies or physical activities that are very different from what they do at work

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University: University of Wisconsin
November 6, 2020 at 5:18 pm

Score: 64.3

Issues:

  1. About 45% of the sentences exceed 20 words. Shorten/split them.
  2. About 15% of the sentences are passive. Convert some of them into their active counterparts.
  3. Still some spelling errors
  4. Preposition errors

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