Reply To: Some parents offer their school-age children money for each high grade(mark) they get in school. Do you think this is a good idea?

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University: University of Wisconsin
November 13, 2020 at 5:30 pm

Score: ungraded

Issues:

  1. About 30% of the sentences exceed 20 words. Shorten/split them.
  2. Spelling errors
  3. Article errors
  4. Word choice errors

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