Reply To: The government should control the amount of violence in films and on television in order to decrease violent crimes in society. To what extent do you agree or disagree?

TOEFL, IELTS, Personal Statement and CV Proofreading Services. IELTS Writing The government should control the amount of violence in films and on television in order to decrease violent crimes in society. To what extent do you agree or disagree? Reply To: The government should control the amount of violence in films and on television in order to decrease violent crimes in society. To what extent do you agree or disagree?

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University: University of Wisconsin
November 20, 2020 at 3:53 am

Score: ungraded

Issues:

  1. About 30% of the sentences exceed 20 words. Shorten/split them.
  2. About 10% of the sentences are passive. Convert some of them into their active counterparts.

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