Reply To: Governments should not spend more money in support of the arts than in support of athletics such as state-sponsored Olympic teams.

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University: University of Wisconsin
November 20, 2020 at 2:57 pm

Score: ungraded

Issues:

  1. About 30% of the sentences exceed 20 words. Shorten/split them.
  2. Lengthy paragraphs. Restrict each paragraph to 90 words.
  3. Article errors
  4. Spelling errors
  5. Do not just restate the question in your introduction, establish your argument instead.

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