Reply To: The following appeared in a letter from a firm providing investment advice to a client. “Homes in the northeastern United States, where winters are typically cold

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University: University of Wisconsin
November 20, 2020 at 10:29 pm

Score: ungraded

Issues:

  1. About 45% of the sentences exceed 20 words. Shorten/split them.
  2. About 35% of the sentences are passive. Convert some of them into their active counterparts.
  3. Lengthy paragraphs. Restrict each paragraph to 90 words.

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