Reply To: Governments should not spend more money in support of the arts than in support of athletics such as state-sponsored Olympic teams.

TOEFL, IELTS, Personal Statement and CV Proofreading Services. TOEFL Writing Governments should not spend more money in support of the arts than in support of athletics such as state-sponsored Olympic teams. Reply To: Governments should not spend more money in support of the arts than in support of athletics such as state-sponsored Olympic teams.

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University: University of Wisconsin
November 23, 2020 at 6:52 pm

Score: 59.3

Issues:

  1. About 15% of the sentences are passive. Convert some of them into their active counterparts.
  2. Lengthy paragraphs. Restrict each paragraph to 90 words.
  3. Verb form errors
  4. Preposition errors

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