Reply To: Rising university fees and scarce employment prospects for graduates have led some people to say that universities should not teach arts subjects, like philosophy and history

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University: University of Wisconsin
November 23, 2020 at 8:32 pm

Score: ungraded

Issues:

  1. About 55% of the sentences exceed 20 words. Shorten/split them.
  2. About 35% of the sentences are passive. Convert some of them into their active counterparts.
  3. Article errors
  4. Add some supporting evidence to your introduction, why is it essential?

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