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University: University of Wisconsin
November 23, 2020 at 10:25 pm

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Issues:

  1. About 40% of the sentences exceed 20 words. Shorten/split them.
  2. About 15% of the sentences are passive. Convert some of them into their active counterparts.
  3. Lengthy paragraphs. Restrict each paragraph to 90 words.

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