Reply To: High school requires students (aged 16-17) to choose an activity to attend in the summer holiday

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November 25, 2020 at 11:02 am

Score: ungraded

Issues:

  1. About 30% of the sentences exceed 20 words. Shorten/split them.
  2. About 10% of the sentences are passive. Convert some of them into their active counterparts.
  3. Preposition errors
  4. Article errors

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