Reply To: In the past, young people depended too much on their parents to make decisions for them; today young people are better able to make decisions about their own lives.

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University: University of Wisconsin
December 3, 2020 at 4:04 am

Score: ungraded

Issues:

  1. About 30% of the sentences exceed 20 words. Shorten/split them.
  2. Article errors
  3. Wordy – simplify sentences and remove unnecessary words

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