Reply To: Some teenagers take part in kinds of activities, such as musical classes, sports classes and so on, but others only focus on one activity which is important to them. Which idea do you support?

TOEFL, IELTS, Personal Statement and CV Proofreading Services. TOEFL Writing Some teenagers take part in kinds of activities, such as musical classes, sports classes and so on, but others only focus on one activity which is important to them. Which idea do you support? Reply To: Some teenagers take part in kinds of activities, such as musical classes, sports classes and so on, but others only focus on one activity which is important to them. Which idea do you support?

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University: University of Wisconsin
December 5, 2020 at 3:00 am

Score: ungraded

Issues:

  1. About 35% of the sentences exceed 20 words. Shorten/split them.
  2. About 15% of the sentences are passive. Convert some of them into their active counterparts.
  3. Spelling errors
  4. Preposition errors

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