Reply To: Do you agree or disagree with the following statement? It’s better to watch serious movies to get deeper thoughts than to watch movies that amuse or entertain you.

TOEFL, IELTS, Personal Statement and CV Proofreading Services. TOEFL Writing Do you agree or disagree with the following statement? It’s better to watch serious movies to get deeper thoughts than to watch movies that amuse or entertain you. Reply To: Do you agree or disagree with the following statement? It’s better to watch serious movies to get deeper thoughts than to watch movies that amuse or entertain you.

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University: University of Wisconsin
December 5, 2020 at 3:27 am

Score: ungraded

Issues:

  1. About 50% of the sentences exceed 20 words. Shorten/split them.
  2. About 20% of the sentences are passive. Convert some of them into their active counterparts.
  3. Wordy – remove unnecessary words and phrases

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