Reply To: Convenience food will become increasingly prevalent and eventually replace traditional foods and traditional methods of food preparation

TOEFL, IELTS, Personal Statement and CV Proofreading Services. IELTS Writing Convenience food will become increasingly prevalent and eventually replace traditional foods and traditional methods of food preparation Reply To: Convenience food will become increasingly prevalent and eventually replace traditional foods and traditional methods of food preparation

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University: University of Wisconsin
December 5, 2020 at 4:32 pm

Score: ungraded

Issues:

  1. About 55% of the sentences exceed 20 words. Shorten/split them.
  2. About 35% of the sentences are passive. Convert some of them into their active counterparts.
  3. Article errors
  4. Simplify introduction- state your argument and some short supporting information

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