Reply To: Convenience food will become increasingly prevalent and eventually replace traditional foods and traditional methods of food preparation

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University: University of Wisconsin
December 5, 2020 at 4:32 pm

Score: ungraded

Issues:

  1. About 55% of the sentences exceed 20 words. Shorten/split them.
  2. About 35% of the sentences are passive. Convert some of them into their active counterparts.
  3. Article errors
  4. Simplify introduction- state your argument and some short supporting information

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