Reply To: Nowadays a large amount of advertising is aimed at children. Some people think this can have negative effects on them and should be banned

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University: University of Wisconsin
December 5, 2020 at 4:36 pm

Score: ungraded

Issues:

  1. About 30% of the sentences are passive. Convert some of them into their active counterparts.
  2. Sentence structure errors, some sentence can be combined to make longer ones
  3. Word choice errors
  4. Article errors

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