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University: University of Wisconsin
December 12, 2020 at 4:35 pm

 

Score: 55.9

Issues:

  1. About 70% of the sentences exceed 20 words. Shorten/split them.
  2. About 15% of the sentences are passive. Convert some of them into their active counterparts.

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